Some people think that it is necessary to travel abroad to learn about other countries, but others think that it is not necessary to travel abroad because all the information can be seen on TV and the internet. Discuss both opinions

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prompted
ultures;
therefore
, people had gone abroad for years;
however
, with advancement of t
he technolo
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the advancement
gy people should not go abroad to gather knowledge about new countries ac
ross the worl
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the new countries
d. Just by a clicking they can reach whatever they want to learn readily, but remaining people still prefer old-fashioned
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y to learn the ne
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the old-fashioned way
w countries. Going abroad and learn new cultures and languages in variably have
been being
without variation or change, in every case
invariably
people’s dream,
especially stu
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a people’s dream
dents who are in university-age. Especially after the evolution of the technology, travel show programs had been popular; so that, people have started being curious about going abroad. There is stereotype
way
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hich includes
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a stereotype way
preparing your own baggage and setting off your voyage,
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d fresh new ways which comprise using technology to explore the earth;
as a result
, the decision depends on the learners’ preferences. At
first
sight, the old-fashioned
way
can be assumed still the most common preference;
however
, the new ways cannot be denied. Traveling and le
arning th
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Travelling
e cultures in their own places is truly practical thing
because reviewi
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a practical thing
ng in real vision the people and their customs undeniably feel deeply their hearts. People can open new web page and
learn recip
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a new web page
es but they
cannot sme
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recipes, but
ll and taste their flavours; so that, if people want to smell soul of the cultures, they can prefer the stereotype
way
.
Moreover,
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stereotypical
every people are fond of some bunch of the art,
such
as music. YouTube, which includes full concert videos and interview of the
starts,
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interviews
an interview
can be used to amuse ourselves;
however
, most of the people cannot get chance to attend
the i
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a chance
the chance
nterview as well as concerts.
Furthermore
, if someone say people to attend the co
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attend
ich comprise the people’s favourite groups and singers, they will make the fans crazy; yet, watching concert videos by YouTube canno
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from
drive the fans crazy because of its simplicity.
Consequently
, the both
way
of the explo
rat
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ways
ion of the new cultures are useful and meaningful; but, according to me, touching the souls and tasting earths of the countries are unchangeable and more appropriate
way
to learn people. My father always says that if you want to learn people and who are they, look their eyes
and touch
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look, their
their hearts because hearts and eyes cannot say lies;
theref
ore
express in words
tell
, if people want to learn the new cultures they can live with the cultures for a while and touch their souls.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • immersive
  • interactions
  • virtual means
  • cultural nuances
  • language acquisition
  • problem-solving
  • adaptability
  • sustainability
  • virtual tours
  • documentaries
  • sophisticated
  • realistic representations
  • comprehensive understanding
  • financial status
  • carbon footprint
  • digital resources
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