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Today, most people get married and give birth in their thirties rather than when they are younger. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion? To what extent do you support this development?

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In modern societies, many couples are married and are waiting until their thirties to have a
baby
. Sometimes they don't end up getting a
child
. I strongly support the idea of waiting to have a
child
 and I believe
this
 is a positive way to live.
This
 support is based on the fact that when you wait to have a
baby
 you get the chance to build a better infrastructure and financial
life
 to support the
child
.
Also
, you give yourself time to prepare emotionally and mentally for the birth of a
child
. Some people can be pretty happy having a kid early.
Firstly
, when a couple wait to have a
baby
 after their thirties in
the
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most cases, they may have gotten a house and a car and even achieve financial independence.
Although
 some people think that money is not important to have a
child
, I believe that without money and a good
infrastructure
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 it is very difficult to maintain a
child
.
However
, it is possible to have a
baby
 early and to provide a good
life
 for the
child
, but
this
 will not be easy. I became a father pretty early, I could not give to my
child
 the
life
 that I have always wanted to give to him.Sometimes I regret being a father too early because had I not been, I could've worked more towards giving him a better
life
. If I were younger and could've done things differently, I would've waited. I am not saying
to
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 everybody has not had a
baby
 before their thirties, but considering the possibility of not caring for that
child
 the way you want to may leave you devastated and
heart broken
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. . In conclusion, having a
baby
 early is not a bad thing, but you would want to know that you are ready or prepared financially and mentally. One has to be careful because
this
 is a huge decision that will change your
life
.
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task response
Work on providing a more balanced argument by acknowledging potential benefits of having children at a younger age and addressing them in your essay.
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