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Some people are of the opinion that there should be a car-free day once every month, on which no private vehicles are allowed on the road. Discuss the advantages and possible disadvantages.

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Its Argued in society that due to traffic congestion and increased
airpollution
Suggestion
air pollution
 there should be a restriction of usage of private vehicles at least for one day per month.The following
paragaraph
one of several distinct subdivisions of a text intended to separate ideas; the beginning is usually marked by a new indented line
paragraph
paragraphs
 would discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the subject
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To begin
 with, the upper hand to control private vehicles is that it will reduce the air
pollution
 considerably
furthermore it
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furthermore, it
 would curb unnecessary traffic congestions in the narrow lanes of the city
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To elaborate Reduced air
pollution
 would lead to improved air quality ultimately better health to the people
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Limited traffic would
also
 drop the level of noise
pollution
 which occurs due to honking in congestion
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However
, overlooking the adverse effects of restriction of private vehicles would be unfair
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 It would lead to increased
crowd
Suggestion
crowding
 on public
transport which
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transport, which
 may lead to accidents while boarding and deboarding due to saturation of mass transit. Which will result in late reporting of office staff
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,
students to their respective destination
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in
Suggestion
In
 continuation
,
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,
it would be a discomfort for people in those newly
devolped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
area
Suggestion
areas
 where
avaibility
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of public
transport
 is an issue. To illustrate, people in rural
area s
a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)
areas
 are dependant on their own vehicles as public
transport
 is not fully
deveolped
being changed over time so as to be e.g. stronger or more complete or more useful
developed
 and is time restricted which will have
impact
Suggestion
an impact
 on their commuting in case of emergency To conclude,
Authorites
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
authorities
 as a start to reduce
pollution
 should initiate car free day once in month ensuring the
avaiabilty
a positive feeling of wanting to push ahead with something
avidity
 of public
transport
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Submitted by Jasbir kaur on

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