The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household ... The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this
The first chart illustrates
proportion
of Add an article
the proportion
energy
used in an average Austrialian
household, Correct your spelling
Australian
while
the second
chart demonstrates percentage
of the Add an article
the percentage
greenhouse
gas
emissions because of occuring
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occurring
this
energy
consumption.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph that
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is that
proportion
of the most Correct article usage
the proportion
energy
consumtion
in Australian Correct your spelling
consumption
household
is registered by heating, Fix the agreement mistake
households
wheras
the percentage of the least Correct your spelling
whereas
it
is witnessed by cooling. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Moreover
, The
water heating has Correct article usage
apply
highest
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the highest
rate
of greenhouse
gas
emission, while
cooling experience
the lowest Fix the agreement mistake
experiences
proportion
of it.
As can be seen from the chart, heating
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the heating
proportion
for energy
use in Australian household come top with just above 40%, followed by water heating has a rate
of 30%. However
, cooling for energy
consumtion
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consumption
show
the least Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
rate
at 2%.
On the other hand
, water
heating Correct article usage
the water
rate
for greenhouse
gas
emission account
for just above 30% of total Change the verb form
accounts
greenhouse
gas
emission. The second
highest percentage is other applications, which stand at just under one-third
. The lowest rate
is shown by cooling at 3%.Submitted by MERVE DEMİR on
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