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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans face in the 21st Century and sea levels are continuing to rise at alarming rates. What problems are associated with this and what are some possible solutions.

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Rapid increment in sea levels is the biggest threat humans face in the
21 st
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21st
 century due to global warming. In the below
passage
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 the problems associated
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 the flooding and the solutions to overcome the threat will be discussed.
Over flooding
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 is one of the biggest challenges faced by
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mankind in the recent past.
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 hike in sea levels deforms the
costal
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coastal
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 line and may lead to
the
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 change in
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geographical size and shape of the region.
Increase
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 in pollution over the past millennium resulted in
the
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raise
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rise
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 in temperature which moved into the next level phenomenon called Global warming. Every individual can experience
the
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 unbearable
raise
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rise
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 in temperature. During summers, there is
record
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raise
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rise
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 in temperature causing the glaciers in
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regions like Antarctica to melt which results in
increase
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an increase
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 in sea levels. Limiting the
usage
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 of gasoline and plastic covers on
the
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 daily basis
are
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is
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 the main problem
solvers
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.
In
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 the verge of
modernization
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modernization,
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 every individual
is owning
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 a personal vehicle which results in
the
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a
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 rapid increase in the
usage
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 of fuel.
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 will be restricted by adopting
few
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a few
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 innovative thoughts like car-pooling and using public transportation. During peak hours, most of the
four-wheeler’s
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 commuters reach destinations individually even though the vehicle can accommodate two more people. Practices like car-pooling and
usage
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 of public transportation will reduce the risk of pollution and
furthermore
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helps
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help
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 in the decrement of Global warming.
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, Global warming is certainly one of the major threats to humans resulting in
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over flooding
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over-flooding
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 in which pollution
also
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played
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 a major role. Practicing
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few of the precautionary measures to limit the
usage
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 of fuel helps mankind to take control over the global warming phenomenon.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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