Studies suggested that nowadays children watch much more television than they did in the past and spend less time on active or creative things. What are the reasons? And what measures should be taken to encourage children to spend more time on active or creative things?

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It has been suggested that

children

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nowadays lean towards reactive

activities

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, like watching

television

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, and away from proactive ones. Given that

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trend leads to a whole host of issues for

children

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, identifying the reasons behind it is key to finding

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solutions. There are a number of reasons why

children

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spend more time watching

television

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First,

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since there are thousands of entertaining shows, movies and music at

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disposal, which are conducive to relaxation and instant mental rewards,

children

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are highly engaged most of the time. In fact, most of the objects and motions they see on

television

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are new to them, which tends to trigger their curiosity and evoke their feelings, either negative or positive, conditioning them to watch more.

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shrinking

playgrounds

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and parks deprive

children

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of outdoor

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, recent housing projects in Hanoi are set to close some of the

playgrounds

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, making

children

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resort to reactive

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such

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as watching

television

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, there is

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a variety of solutions, mostly parental, to reverse

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trend.

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parents can help their

children

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refrain from watching

television

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excessively by setting a daily limit. By encouraging

children

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to consistently adhere to the limit, they will be less reliant on amusing

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, especially ones that are addictive.

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even if there are no

playgrounds

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, modern cities usually offer indoor

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and sports, which are

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considered proactive.

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, corporations and parents should cooperate to create, maintain and promote these

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and indoor

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to the new generation, perhaps offering free entrance for

children

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under a certain age or supporting low-income families. In conclusion,

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the trend might be difficult to reverse, there are ways to get around it. The coordination among city officials, corporations and parents can certainly make a difference in

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task response

Great job on supporting the main points with relevant examples. Make sure to clearly address all aspects of the question in the introduction and conclusion.

coherence cohesion

The essay has a good logical structure. Ensure that ideas are linked together more cohesively, perhaps by using more cohesive devices such as transition words and pronouns.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

296 words

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