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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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When Apple's CEO Steve
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 did his product launch presentations,
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 tees and jeans were what he wore. Many
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 nowadays value employees' competency higher than image,
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 some
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 still have policies to make sure their
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staffs
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dress
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 decently.
This
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 ought to allow flexibility for
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staffs
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 to
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what
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 they think is appropriate. Many believe that first impression is important for building relationships. What you
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reflect
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 your personality and how
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you evaluate the people you meet and the activities you engage
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 In fact, if you work in a conventional customer service environment, you should
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 nicely, at least more decent than your customers do, in order to show your respect to them. A receptionist of a company,
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, often is the first person that visitors meet and talk with when they visit the company. A nicely dressed receptionist definitely
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 a proper image of a company to strangers.
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, it is understandable why many
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 have rules of
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 for
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 to follow.
On the other hand
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, some
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, particularly those
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 innovations, do not force their
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staffs
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 to
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 in a certain way.
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, workers are allowed to choose how to
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according to
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 their preference, mood and personality. The reason is that these
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 believe
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 will result in more
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.
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 there are a lot of technology
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'
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Facebook, Netflix and Apple, etc do not
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 or project
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 like bankers, accountants or hotel managers: men always wear suits, women always in high heels.
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, many
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staffs
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 working for tech
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wearing
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 jeans and sneakers, and even shorts in summer. Obviously, creativities and skills are valued relevantly higher than appearance in these
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.
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, I believe
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 of
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 is more important than what they wear during working hours.
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, if their role has a need to
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 with customers or clients face-to-face, it is
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 necessary to
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 socially acceptable to show one's respect.
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, I think
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 should set some guidelines
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dress
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according to
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 their business and
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staffs'
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 role nature. Allowing some flexibility for
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 to choose what to wear in the workplace, is one of many ways to promote pleasant working ambience. Ultimately, elevates
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 creativities and
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 which
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 their
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