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Many people want their country to host an international sporting event. Others believe that international sporting events bring more problems than benefits.

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A group of people strongly believes their nation must utilize an opportunity to organize the sporting event that involve participation of many countries.
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, others oppose
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 reaction and believe it creates more troubles in the
country
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 than providing any benefits. I agree with the former opinion point of view than the latter.
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 of all, the event shall be organized with the money paid by the taxpayers. The amount must be utilized for their welfare rather than spending on the sports for entertaining or amusing a group of spectators. It is quite possible that diseases may widely spread when several travellers are allowed to visit a
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 at a single instance.
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, providing security to all the players and their supporting staff is a Herculean task. Any failure to provide proper protection could permanently damage the image of the nation.
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, it is advised to stay far from conducting
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 events.
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, organizing sporting events would bring several monetary and diplomatic benefits to any
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. Hosting
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 prestigious events must be a privilege and honour to any
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. It brings several tourists into the
country
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 who not only watch the sports, but
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 explore the tourist attractions of the
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 and
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 the tourism industry and local businesses will be benefited another benefit which cannot be ignored is the youth of the
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 shall be inspired with
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 experience and attract towards playing sports that in turn improve tell healthy lifestyle offering to sale broadcasting rights alone shall bring several million dollars into account of the
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. In conclusion and to offer my opinion, organizing sports events is not an easy task considering the odds.
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, the benefits overweigh the drawbacks and
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 I support the opinion to conduct the event.
Submitted by Krishna Ramavarapu on

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