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Many people believe that we should protect all wild animals while others believe we should just protect some of them. Discuss both views and give your opinion .

#people #animals
In recent times, some unfortunate events
have undoubtedly threaten
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have undoubtedly threatened
 the lives of many
wildlife
 animals. Many people argue that protection of all
wildlife
 creatures
are
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is
 imminent in the wake of natural crisis,
however
, others contend that only those who are on the verge of extinction should be protected. While supporting the latter view; in
this
 essay we will discuss both sides of the arguments.
To begin
 with, those who
favor
promote over another
favour
 the protection of all wild
species
 believe that in the presence of any unprecedented calamity, many of them will be at risk of losing their lives. As there
are
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is
uncertainity
being unsettled or in doubt or dependent on chance
uncertainty
uncertainties
 of climate conditions around the globe, threats to wild animals are inevitable. Recently,
for example
, fire incidents in
Amazon rainforest
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the Amazon rainforest
has deteriorated
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have deteriorated
 lives of many inhabitants of the forest.
Therefore
, it is evident
for
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to
 many people that all
wildlife
 animals ought to be protected to avoid casualties due to any natural disaster.
Nevertheless
, there are others who contend that only endangered
species
 should be protected. I hold a strong stance with
this
 perception, it is because, there are wild animals who can go extinct, if
priorties
something owned; any tangible or intangible possession that is owned by someone
properties
 are not shifted toward them.
For instance
, the
species
 of white tigers are only few left, in
such
 circumstances- protecting their
species
 should be utmost crucial.
Hence
, monitoring those
wildlife
 animals who are
susceptable
(often followed by 'of' or 'to') yielding readily to or capable of
susceptible
 of extinction need
priorty
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
. To sum up,
although
 all animals need to be protected from unexpected situation that may possess
threat
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a threat
 to their lives, I believe,
priorty
status established in order of importance or urgency
priority
priorities
 should be given to those who are on the verge of extinction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • conservation status
  • ecological significance
  • holistic approach
  • endangered species
  • natural heritage
  • unforeseen negative impacts
  • economically non-viable
  • prioritization
  • ecosystem balance
  • conservation efforts
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