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The diagrams below shows the change in a particular college campus from 1975 to 2020. The second map indicates the proposed future change about this campus.

The diagrams below shows the change in a particular college campus from 1975 to 2020. The second map indicates the proposed future change about this campus.
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The maps reveal the change
of
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in
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 university
campus
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campuses
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 between 1975 and 2010.
Overall
, the most
different
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difference
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 is the car park was extended and the new indoor sports
centre
 will be constructed in 2020. The most striking change is the car park was extended to account fulled in the right of the top on the campus. The drama theatre was replaced
to
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 the geology room and
then
 the music
centre
 was relocated nearby the geology room and
new
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 car park. The lecture rooms remained unchanged. The science buildings had been constructed in 2010. The sports field at the left of the top
to
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 the campus is replacing the indoor sports
centre
, predicting
finish
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 in 2020.
Likewise
, a new road will
also
 finish in 2020.
However
, the library was demolished
to
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in
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 half. Another site of the library was turned
to
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into
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 the IT
centre
 in 2010. Above those buildings, there was growing a new tree.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words centre with synonyms.
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