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Band 5

Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. Do you agree or disagree?

It is certainly true that
people
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 nowadays have
the
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 abundance of selection.
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 when
people
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 are
above
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influenced by modern life. I concur
with
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that
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 having a lot of
choice
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choices
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 is really hard for
people
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, but I incline that the variety means
people
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 have more opportunities to do whatever they love. With the hustle and bustle of life,
people
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 obviously tend to find some ways to relieve boredom when they feel tired. One of
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the measures
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measures
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the measures
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 that help them distress is enjoying their own preferences,
in particular
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 every single one of
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their hobbies
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hobbies
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their hobbies
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also
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needs
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need
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needs
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 to be various.
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,
people
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 going shopping will delight
with
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in
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 many types of clothing, they
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 amazed by the options that sellers give them in terms of costs and shapes, or models,
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 they can buy a suitable product with pleasure. As the variety
help
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helps
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people
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 have more
change
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chances
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 to seek the right thing
to
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for
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 them, there are many choices that are
also
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 good.
In
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On
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 the other hand, the abundance of choices can drive
people
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 crazy. In
some
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apply
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certain situations, they
always
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are always
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 afraid that their selections are right or not, they fear that they will bet their life if they choose
wrong
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the wrong
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 direction.
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, some
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 are pursuing their path
on
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in
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 a company, they are nearly getting a career prospect, but a big deal in other company is made with higher salaries
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is
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are
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 too easy to get
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a “living
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 wage”.
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 makes them struggle with their opinions, but
it is clear that
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 pursuing a path seems to be better than regularly changing jobs.
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I personally think that every single prime is required to
consider
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be considered
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 in some
ways
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way
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. In conclusion, I believe that having too many choices is clearly inevitable. The
importance
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important
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 thing is
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’s
decision
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decisions
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 which
people
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 need to take into account.

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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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