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Discipline
 is important for the all round development of children;
however
, nowadays many students seem to lack it. According to some people parents are responsible for inculcating the value of self-control in their children; others insist that it is the duty of teachers.
This
 essay will analyse why its entire necessary for parents to teach the self-control to their kid. Different schools have different subjects depending on the child’s age and each subject is taught by a specific teacher. It is highly unlikely that each lecturer teaches the same standards of
discipline
 for all pupils across all grades. Each child is different and has to be moulded depending on the child’s behaviour. To illustrate
further
, the school near my house has 40 students in one class. The teacher often finds it very difficult to control the class and teach the lesson within the allotted
time
. The teacher is more concerned about explaining the lesson and completing the course and gives less attention to those who misbehave in their class.
On the contrary
, parents observe their kid very closely since their birth. They tend to spend a lot of
time
 with their children during their free
time
 at home. Since they interact more with their child, they have an opportunity to teach them
discipline
 and mend their behaviour. Children often try to imitate their parents and learn behavioural skills from them.
For example
, my son wakes up early in the morning and gets ready for school as we all get ready for our offices.
This
 behaviour was not taught by any of us; rather it was something he learned from his own observation. To conclude
this
 essay, teachers in
this
 modern era find it extremely difficult to
discipline
 all the children and mend their ways within the allotted
time
. It is the responsibility of the parents to
discipline
 their child and show them what is right and wrong.
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