A government’s role is only to provide defence capability and urban infrastructure (roads, water supplies, etc.). All other services (education, health, social security) should be provided by private groups or individuals in the community.

Due to advancement in various fields of technology, the life expectancy and
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of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
quality of an average human has tremendously improved.
However
, after
digitalization
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digitalisation
and arrival of different social media platforms, the world has become a smaller place. It feels like
whole world
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the whole world
a whole world
is at your fingertips.
This
situation
also
puts extreme pressure on a
government
because
media
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the media
is
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are
everywhere.
This
essay discusses about dividing certain sections between public and private to provide them
a
expresses position, direction or location, or point in time
at
ease. For the overall development in a country or improving
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
citizens life quality, a
government
has to run all the different kinds of departments at the same time and
hence
they always fail to meet the expectations of
general population
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the general population
. Certain services should be given to private organizations to run.
Although
giving away control of some department to some non-public entities may see
risky but
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risky, but
previously many governments
has excelled
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have excelled
by approaching
this
method carefully and with maximum planning it can yield wonderful achievements. Certain areas like planning for the country's
defense
(military) military action or resources protecting a country against potential enemies
defence
,
strenghtening
becoming stronger
strengthening
of national infrastructure and public health sector should be handled by
government
. Education, social services, public transport can be distributed
among
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between
experienced private groups. Decreasing work load from a particular task is directly proportional
with
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to
the increased efficiency in that task. By arranging a group of volunteers or retirees to work for local social security services in the
community we
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community, we
may be able to kill two birds with one stone as they will
also
feel productive. By privatising education system,
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a member of the race of people living in America when Europeans arrived
Indian
government
has gained a lot after 2013. Private entities ensured every child had access to get registered for a school in their respective area.
This
helped them to ramp up their literacy rate. Private schools
provides
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provide
exceptional scope of growth.
Infrastructural
rise and rural area development must be
forseen
realize beforehand
foreseen
by
government
. Providing water and electricity to every citizen should be their primary objective.
Government
should
also
strengthen
country's defense system
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the country's defence system
country's defence system
by planning
methodically
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methods
and by avoiding over sending. If allotted more
then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
required, national budget will lose balance. To maintain equilibrium,
government
must take care of
forementioned services
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the aforementioned services
aforementioned services
along with keeping a close and watchful
eyes
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eye
on the designated private work groups assigned to prevent corruption before it occurs.
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