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Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#meat #health
Disability is an inconsistent topic, which is completely different on either side. In order for a healthy person to truly understand the experiences of people with disabilities, we must look at people with disabilities and see our lives. If people see disabled people becoming more realistic, they will be seen as more ordinary, and it will make both sides more interactive. People with disabilities are living a difficult life, but that does not mean there is no value in life. Nancy Mairs, Andre Dubus, Harriet McBryde Johnson are all disabled, wrote about their experiences and opinions. Many people in the community believe that disability is a problem for others. They do not believe that obstacles will affect their lives, they rarely consider the
experience
 of people with disabilities and the
experience
 of taking care of people with disabilities. Without direct
experience
, they claim that at least things are better than the past. In September 2008 I was appointed chairman of the Care of Persons with Disabilities Care. The main responsibility of the committee is to provide the Australian government with expert advice and information on the formulation and implementation of national disability strategies. Through its members, the Council provides a means to keep disabled people, their families, friends, and carers expressing their policies and strategies affecting their lives. More than 650 million people live
in
Suggestion
on
 disabled people worldwide. People with disabilities often live
in
Suggestion
on
at
 the edge of society in every part of the world, in every country, and have lost some basic
experience
 in their lives. They do not want to go to school, find jobs, have their own house, make family, nurture children, socialize or vote. Disabled people constitute the largest and most vulnerable minority in the world. According to the United Nations Handbook on "Refusing to Equality: Achieving the Rights of People with Disabilities", these figures are irritated: 20% of the poorest in the world are disabled, 98% of children in developing countries I have not attended school. One of the disabled street children, the literacy rate of disabled adults is as low as 3%, and in some countries the literacy rate of disabled women is 1%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • chronic diseases
  • balanced diet
  • nutritional deficiencies
  • plant-based diet
  • ethical concerns
  • environmental impact
  • deforestation
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • sustainable
  • Vitamin B12
  • processed meat substitutes
  • social and cultural implications
  • mitigate
  • full-time vegetarian
  • plant-based options
  • health benefits
  • commit to vegetarianism
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