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Traffic congestion is becoming increasingly problematic in major cities. What solutions can you suggest to help solve the problem?

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In the modern world, new technologies have created a huge number of cars, so
this
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 led to
traffic
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 congestion in
megapolis
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Megapolis
. Obviously,
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 big problem led to many environmental problems
such
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 as: air pollution,
light noise
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light, noise
, acid rain and so on. Overpopulation of the planet has led to a large number of technologies that pollute the environment. Thanks to technology, it is possible to reduce emissions into the atmosphere and the cause of
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 congestion.
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, despite the fact that the planet is slowly dying, there are defenders who are trying to reduce
traffic
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 jams and
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as a result pollution
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pollution as a result
.
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, in some European countries have introduced certain days when the entire population does not use cars;
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 in some Scandinavian countries, the government encourages citizens who do not use vehicles in the form of tax exemptions; in Venice, every year specially increase taxes for car owners. Аll of the above solutions are very effective. Аll
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 helps to ensure small
traffic
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 on city roads. Many governments are trying to solve global problems and one of them is
traffic
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 jams that lead to environmental pollution.
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, I think that government should purchase ecological transport in the form of electric buses for people and
this
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 one led people refuse from
car
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the car
. If government
provide
Suggestion
provides
 urban residents with full-fledged electric transport
traffic
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,
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 the need for a large number of gasoline-powered cars will disappear.
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