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Some people argue that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while others believe that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, and a permanent job is more important. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
job
 security is not as important as how we feel satisfied with what we are doing, while others believe that we should do jobs that help to free us from the stress of unemployment and ensure that we have a stable income. I am personally in favour of the view of the
first
 group. Those who like the idea of doing a long-term career say that in today's highly comparative labour market, where thousands of new graduates face unemployment annually, staying the same
job
 is a much safer choice than switching jobs to find
job
 satisfaction. The combination of the labour market and living costs is more and more rising mean that
job
 security has become the most important consideration for
job
 seekers. Many people experience temporary unemployment after quit their previous
job
 to look for new ones that offer a higher level of
job
 satisfaction. For those who are the primary breadwinners,
This
 is a risky decision. Despite these arguments, I feel that we should never stop looking for jobs that make us happy and content. I personally believe that no matter how comparative the market is, there are always be sufficient jobs for each person. Spending a few months or even a year to seeking a
job
 makes me happy is much better than spending a lifetime trapped in a place that we are reluctant to do because it's just as safe and stable.
For example
, my grandfather always regretted that he didn't follow the career of the photography career he used to love.
Instead
, he chose to work as a teacher due to his stable monthly
paycheck
.
Accept space
.
 In conclusion,
Although
 some of the ideas that a secure work are more important than a satisfying work, I'm of the opinion that we should always look for a
job
 that brings us happiness and satisfaction rather than stability.
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