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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

#threat #weapons #world #peace #power #energy #technology
As the
world
 is moving fast towards technological advancements,
the
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modern sources of
energy
 are getting more and more popular. The industries that work towards developing solar
energy
, water
energy
, and nuclear
energy
 have introduced
this
 globe to a whole new
power
 that we did not know was possible to generate. Amongst these,
the
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nuclear
energy
source
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 is some that can act as a boon or threat to the
world
.
Till
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the
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date, many countries have developed nuclear weapons that could be a reason for a huge global annihilation and could possibly give the globe an irreparable loss, if used. the
world
 has witnessed the effects that Hiroshima and Nagasaki had and how long it took for them to recover from
that
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 damage caused by nuclear weapons. Maybe, the thought of that immense destruction is helping the nations to hold peace and not to harm any other country in any way that may lead them to exercise
this
power
. Despite
this
 disadvantage, scientists have found the key to use the
power
 nuclear
energy
 has in a way to help the
energy
 sector in many ways. Almost every developed and developing
countries
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have
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 established nuclear
power
 stations. They have developed the technology with which they can produce
energy
 causing the least damage to the environment.
This
energy
 is produced not using any non-renewable
energy
 sources, which helps to attain sustainable development. The more we use
this
energy
 in
the
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offices, factories, and even in households, the more it will benefit us in saving the environment. To recapitulate, Nuclear
energy
 is a source that can end the
world
 but, if proper laws are made and all the countries unanimously agree to use
this
 source for the advantages it has, it could be game-changing for the
energy
 sector globally. Yes, I believe the benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • Mutually assured destruction
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  • Cost-effective
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  • Proliferation
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