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Prevention is better than cure . Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures.

#prevention #cure #diseases #measures
"Prevention is better than cure" is the Vietnamese maxim when it comes to
health
care
.
This
 is consistent with the policy of primary
health
care
 - the message of the World
Health
 Organization
this
 year. Prevention is cheaper than cure, which is evident in terms of economy, society and individuals. In real life, primary
care
 or prevention is naturally taking place everywhere. For children, many
health
 programs
such
 as infant
health
care
, expanded immunization, school
health
 programs, children's dental
care
, sports programs, school physical education, etc.
help
Suggestion
Help
 protect children.
health
a healthy state of wellbeing free from disease
Health
 protection for children better and better. As the internet grows, adults have gained knowledge. The prevention for adults by propagating nutrition and hygiene education becomes easier and more effective. The awareness of food hygiene and safety in society is more and more concerned. During the meal, people have known a lot of attention to clean food,
to
Suggestion
for
of
 the dangers of
sprayed
Suggestion
spray
 vegetables, against spices containing chemicals harmful to
health
. But toxic food still creeps into the tray of each family. To improve
this
 situation, the authorities need to be more aggressive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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