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A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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I know some countries which are famous for their
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 like Italy, Greece, France. I
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 have been there. It was impressive to see their gorgeous scenery. I heard that for countries like I mentioned, it takes huge rate when it comes to their total income, which means it is very important and beneficial to take foreign tourists for them. Thanks to those tourists, they can get not only a lot of money, but
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 can get great image if the tourists are satisfied with their travel. Once they get good images, the more students want to study abroad or want to work for their country and maybe it would be beneficial when they have to commerce with other countries, too.
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, when I went there, I could
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 see some trash and noise problems. Due to tons of tourists who didn't care other nation's environment and other people's private life, I worried people who lived there.
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, in Benezia of Italy, I saw some trashes over the river and some tourists talked loudly
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 the other people's house. I think those kinds of problems should be revised as soon as possible. If it is not, it would be just torturing for them, not a good thing. I admit there are advantages and
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 drawbacks when it comes to travel, but still, I think it would be more beneficial if many tourists visit their country. Drawbacks could be solved by their part of income from
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. To make a long story short, I think it would be great if some problems could be solved in
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, which means there are still more advantages in
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable tourism
  • ecotourism
  • heritage sites
  • hospitality industry
  • tourist influx
  • cultural commodification
  • ecological footprint
  • economic diversification
  • carrying capacity
  • cultural sensitivity
  • destination marketing
  • travel advisories
  • visitor management
  • impact assessment
  • tourism revenues
  • authentic experience
  • visitor satisfaction
  • conservation efforts
  • seasonal fluctuation
  • social sustainability
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