Violence among young people has increased dramatically over the past 50 years. This rise moves in tandem with the growth in violent media.Thus, the conclusion can be drawn that violent media is the main cause of violence among young people. Do you agree or disagree?

Over the
last
five decades, violence among
younsters
a young person of either sex
youngsters
has drastically increased.Several individuals allege that the development of violent media in
television
and internet and from
this
, many
infere
reason by deduction; establish by deduction
infer
inferred
that violent media is rapidly increasing the crime rate among young people. To me, I partially agree
ith
expresses the means used
with
this
stetement
a message that is stated or declared; a communication (oral or written) setting forth particulars or facts etc
statement
, as I see other reasons
to
Suggestion
for
this
behaviour
.
To begin
with, there should not be
denying
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denied
of the fact that social media and
television
are affecting not only on the young, but on
aged
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aging
adults as well. News companies report on newspapers and
television
extremely cruel content to attract bigger audience.
Subsequently
, viewers in the face of children- one of the most affectionate part of the auditory soak up the violence from screens on a daily basis. Another striking point is that vicious computer
games
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game
, which consist of tasks
such
as killing people or stealing
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
folks' property promote anti-social
behaviour
.
Thus
, children from youngest ages are used to cruelty and vandalism, even though it all is in virtual reality.
On the other hand
, the impact of
television
and social media seems to be trivial
comparing
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compared
comparable
to the relationship with
society
and parents.
First
of all, it is parents liability to boost children's logical abilities to distinguish what is "good" and "bad".
Moreover
, hostility and sometimes rejection of children by
society
may be another cause of violent
behaviour
, as young people want to settle in the community and after unsuccessful attempts, they go for rigid path to make their name.
Therefore
, lack of involvement of parents in children's life and
inability
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the inability
of
society
to act
empathetically
are crucially causing the violent
behaviour
. In summary, there is no doubt that violent media invokes corresponding
behaviour
among young people,
however
, the role of parents and
society
also
causes
this
rising trend.
Submitted by Thành Nguyễn Tiến on

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