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Modern technology is changing our world. This has advantages such as bringing people closer together through communication. It also has disadvantages such as destroying the differences between cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The variation of the new
technology
 in the world. It gains more communication in human to be closer.
However
, it might destroy the culture difference. In my opinions, the pros are more than the cons of the technological development. I strongly disagree with
this
 statement.
First
 of all,
technology
Suggestion
the technology
 has a well developed in the nation. As people can use more technological product during working in office. When employees need to communicate with the other companies which stay in a foreign country, they can better use of the online meeting on the computer. It is useful for the company to communicate with the others.
Also
, teenagers and the elders can communicate each other when they are not staying at the same home.
For example
, Some oversea students can communicate with their families easily to stay a well connected in the different part of the Earth.
Second
, visitors can use many technological products to communicate with the local people. It can gain more experience with the foreigner.
Moreover
, the oversea students can learn more history or culture in the place that they want to know. They can more beneficial that without the new
technology
. It seems that it would not
destory
do away with, cause the destruction or undoing of
destroy
 the difference in culture,
such
 as the habits in society, the experience in
different country
Suggestion
different countries
a different country
, the language. The language and the habits cannot replace by the others. In conclusion, modern
technology
 has more positive effect in the world,
such
 as the national development and the good communication in-between oversea.
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