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Modern buildings are appearing in large numbers but some people believe that we should build our buildings in traditional styles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In many urban areas, there are still a variety of old buildings.
Although
 I agree that contemporary buildings are more suitable for modern context, I believe that traditional styles are
also
 worthy to be built and admired. The obvious argument in its
favor
promote over another
favour
 is that characteristic traditional buildings specially designed for local residents are much more suitable for them to live in than uniform modern architectures. Their structures constructed in relation to climate and geography follow conventional patterns and feature unique characters
such
 as raw materials used and overall height standardized, which enables them to shelter dwellers against disturbances
such
 as earthquake, tsunami and chronic drought as much as possible, and unlike modern buildings, they
are distinguished
Suggestion
distinguish
 between regions rather than stereotyped wherever the location is. If the relentless substitution of various modern architectures into every corner of our lives continues, the unconscious concept of replacing the old things with the new ones might one day completely oust the mindset of cherishing the moments that we are currently experiencing or being nostalgic about the past, which would be a loss of the chances to stay in the golden old days, as well as the sad disappearance of a sense of security about the ever-changing world and the time itself as the changes are always inevitable. What would an individual’s life quality be without stable circumstances to consider what they are hoping to achieve in their lives, or inherited family bonds without its accommodation being remained? In conclusion, both modern architectures and traditional ones have their own values in terms of different context, in which our culture and history
are shown
Suggestion
is shown
 by conventional structures whereas multi-functions and comfort are manifested via modern designs.
Therefore
, preservation on old styles and embracing new constructs can be achieved simultaneously.
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