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some people say that economic growth is the only way to end hunger and poverty, while others say that economic growth is damaging the environment so it must be stopped. Discuss both views and give tour opinion.

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The influences of economic improvement in the society and
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environment
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the environment
 are a frequent issue among countries. Contrary many believe that the development of economic would be able to provide enough food and money for all people, others think it is hurtful to the
environment
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. I personally believe that economic
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 can decrease the number of poor and hungry people if countries control the amount of wastes for the
environment
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. Economic prosperity leads to increase the standards of facilities and accessing of people to these kinds of equipment which decrease the rate of fertility in terms of hunger and poverty. To be specified, with the advent of new
technology
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, the level of education and hygiene is growing up, by which the job vacancy and salary of people are increasing.
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 it can affect the rate of poverty or hungry people. Another perspective says that the economic recovery causes high rate of population under which the amount of waste is increasing and it can be harmful for the
environment
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. In order to provide welfare of these people, countries need to use more energy and materials from the
environment
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.
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 the
environment
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 cannot replace these losses. Having said that economic growth and emerging new
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technology prompt
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technology, prompt
 countries to decline the damage of
environment
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 like using the renewable energy and materials with the lowest hurt. To conclude, economic development and new
technology
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 can either eliminate hunger and poverty or increase the damage of
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environment
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the environment
 in terms of overpopulation. So it relates to people how to use new
technology
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 and
valorizing
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 the
environment
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.
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