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People now have the freedom to work and live anywhere in the world due to the development of communication technology and transportation. Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, workers have the option (opportunity) to
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 remotely due to advances in Information Technology and transportation.
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 essay will argue that the advantages of
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 outweigh the drawbacks. It will be
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 demonstrated that people, in general, feel better when they can
work
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 more comfortably and that
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 ability can reduce costs for both employer and employee, followed by an analysis of how the primary disadvantage, namely unemployment by job transfer, is not valid. A great part of
work
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 today can be carried out anywhere on earth as long as there is a stable Internet connection.
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 to say that people can improve their
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 just by staying in places where they can concentrate better. A recent study carried out by the research company Gartner revealed that companies prefer to keep their employees working from home and close to their family. Working out of the office
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 helps to reduce costs. When a person works from home, he or she can wear inexpensive and more comfortable clothes. During the COVID-19 pandemic that has been plaguing the world,
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, the costs related to food, clothing, and transportation for workers decreased dramatically. Some authorities contend that remote
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 hurts the economy. Part of the
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 that could be done domestically
is transferred
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transfers
 to other countries with lower salaries.
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, many call-
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an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 services from countries
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 as the United States were moved to India, where spoken English is adequate and salaries are just a fraction of what they would be in the original country. In conclusion, the development of modern communication and transportation technologies led to better
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 conditions and significant cost reductions.
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 vastly outweighs the weak argument of increased unemployment due to the transfer of jobs.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • communication technology
  • transportation
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • freedom
  • work and live
  • development
  • increased job opportunities
  • flexibility
  • work-life balance
  • cultural exposure
  • diversity
  • economic growth
  • globalization
  • social isolation
  • loneliness
  • loss of community
  • sense of belonging
  • expensive cost of living
  • housing
  • strain on infrastructure
  • resources
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