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Being a celebrity-such as a famous film star or sports personality-brings problems as well as benefits. Do you think that being a celebrity brings more benefits or more problems?

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It is true that being a sport star or an actor claims more benefits due to their fames.
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 some trouble creating situations which are faced by these celebrities due to their profession.
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, they get advantages from their work.
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, the following essay will depict about the profit the Film stars obtain.
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, it will elicit about the VIP Sport individual getting rewards due to their post.
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 with, Bollywood actors are getting highly paid, though they are not being able to do their acting Up the nut shell.
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, they are getting profits with
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 under performances, it is just because of their popularity. Being an actor, they can get many free equipments, free outfits to dress up,
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 they get discounts on
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, a half decade ago, Salman Khan went to buy the Royal car Jaguar from the Tata groups in their showroom, for being a fame holding individual he was rewarded with 35% of discount.
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 the beneficial outcome which is only applicable for
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 superstars.
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, Sports personality
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 gets the advantage of their popularity and fame. They Advertise many brands which offer them money and sports accessories.
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, Virat Kohli is the brand ambassador of MRF which elicits the advertisement of
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 company. Due to his fan base
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 brand is very famous nowadays. According to the news it is depicted that almost 45% of the income is owned by Virat. To conclude, it is noted that VIP individuals get more benefits for their profession.
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