IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4

Public libraries will soon no longer be housed in a building as al facilities and books will be available online for all to access. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of public libraries only existing online.

#libraries #facilities #books #access
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
Books play an important role in our lives. It is one of
effective ways
Suggestion
the effective ways
o f
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 learning. Libraries are one of
best
Suggestion
the best
 places where we can find a collection of various
type
Suggestion
types
 of books.
However
Linking Words
, now a days libraries are not limited to buildings. Now we have online
access
Use synonyms
 to almost every book that was only available in
libraries building
Suggestion
the library building
library building
. In near future everyone, who has
access
Use synonyms
 to
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 will be able to read most of
books online
Suggestion
the books online
. To my mind, it is a good phenomenon in
modern era
Suggestion
the modern era
 as most people do not have to go to
library
Suggestion
the library
 to read books. At
first
Linking Words
 I wish to discuss
advantages
Suggestion
the advantages
 of online libraries. If libraries are would be accessible online,
then
Linking Words
 there would be
positive impact
Suggestion
a positive impact
 on
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 as we would not have to use
papers
Suggestion
paper
 to print books. It will lead to less
emision
the act of emitting; causing to flow forth
emission
emissions
 of toxic gases to
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 resulted from
production
Suggestion
the production
 of paper.
Moreover
Linking Words
, there would be
significant reduction
Suggestion
a significant reduction
significant reductions
 in
cutting
Suggestion
the cutting
 of trees for production of paper. On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
, if public libraries will only exist online, it will be
big inconvenience
Suggestion
a big inconvenience
 for people who either do not have
access
Use synonyms
 to
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 or they do not know how to
access
Use synonyms
 libraries online.
In addition
Linking Words
 to
this
Linking Words
, online libraries will attract more readers who like to spend more time on
mobile phone
Suggestion
a mobile phone
 or computer. Those people might find
more beneficial
Suggestion
most beneficial
 to read a book online than to spend hours on social media. On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
, those people who started using
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 just to read books online may shift
thier
of them or themselves
their
 interest to other services available online.
Moreover
Linking Words
, online libraries have
less cost
Suggestion
less costly
 to set up. Anyone would be able build and online library without spending a big part of his wealth. On
other hand
Suggestion
the other hand
, online libraries are
easier
Suggestion
easy
 target
to
Suggestion
for
of
 those who want to steal sensitive information available in libraries. Currently, we have some libraries where few books and
doccuments
writing that provides information (especially information of an official nature)
documents
 are not accessible to anyone. Online libraries would be
easy target
Suggestion
an easy target
 for hackers. In the end, I can conclude that online
availablity
the quality of being at hand when needed
availability
 of libraries
have
Suggestion
has
 both negative and positive sides. If we can assure
avialablity
Suggestion
the availability
availability
 of online libraries to
everyone
Accept comma addition
everyone, then
then
Linking Words
 it could have less disadvantages.
Submitted by singh forever on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: