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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Avoiding
meat
 or fish in your daily life makes
lot
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lots
 of changes not only in your personal health
,
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,
 but at the same time you are contributing something to your society. The personal benefits are you
feel
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feeling
 quite energized the whole day as you are not consuming heavy fats. Consuming
Meat
 is a high fat intake
,
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,
 which gets you
in to
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into
 a number of health problems.
Also its
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Also, it
Also it
 is not safe to consume
meat
 as they can contain "n " number of viruses, for
eg
: tapeworm, which can enter
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 your body on consumption and can even result in death.
one
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One
 of my
friend
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friends
 actually died recently
by
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in
this
 cause. He went for hunting in Australian forests and consumed
meat
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the meat
 and he was found dead by consumption of tapeworm.
This
 is
serious problem
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a serious problem
 which we are inviting to us.. Not only that if we keep on eating
meat
,
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,
 fish
..
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..
the
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The
 whole life cycle gets changed and there can be extinction of certain species in the world.
This
 has been happening past few years..The humans have not given any rights to take up another life.
but
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But
 we are doing it..
we
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We
 kill fish and animals just for our happiness. If people think that's the only tasty food, they are wrong..There are many vegetarian dishes which are tastier than
meat
. I would
advice
give advice to
advise
 my friends to try dig grand
moms
 recipes..If you get used to veggies, you can notice a remarkable change in your personal health as well as your well being. The way of
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
healthy lifestyles
 is
bit
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a bit
 hard to adopt, but once we are
into
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in
 it is
wonderful experience
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a wonderful experience
.
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