There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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There are many different types of

music

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in the world today. Why do we need

music

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? Is the traditional

music

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of a country more important than the International

music

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that is

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heard everywhere nowadays? In the history of

human

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humanity

, people always try to be happy.

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Therefore they

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Therefore, they

have found

different type

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a different type

of things to do that, and

music

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is one of them. The

music

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which was discovered by people who want to make happy themselves is one of vital thing the calm human soul.

Music

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which touches people’s emotions and hearts is power If people know how can they use it as a healer.

when

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When

people feel upset, they compose some sad melodies. In

contras

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countries

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, when they feel happy, they compose nice melodies to make

hem

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a hem

happy. When

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touch people’s heart, they feel

relax

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relaxed

, comfortable.

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music

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can be

rehabilitation

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rehabilitated

for all of us.

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, a movie which has no

good

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better

sountracks

sound recording on a narrow strip of a motion picture film

soundtrack

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does not liked by people, but if the movie has good

sountracks

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syntax

soundtracks

poeple

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

this

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movie. Because

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is effect our emotions. Why many people love watching t Lord of the Rings or Harry Potter, have you ever thought about that

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Because the movies which have amazing

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when

heared

detected or perceived by the sense of hearing

heard

heated

hired

by people

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they go their imagine life, because the

music

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support our feelings.

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Therefore people

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Therefore, people

need

music

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. Traditional

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which reflecting features of cultures and countries is some kind of a sign to realize what the countries have to show other people about their culture.

Tradiational

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Traditional

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make

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makes

people stick together, because these people who have

common point

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a common point

in the matter of traditional

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have many true to life stories.

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, International

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only products

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the only products

of popular culture. It is like an instant

products

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product

. It is

become

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becoming

popular suddenly and

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goes out rapid. People care these sort of

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just for a while.

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, Traditional

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is a cult

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, it

is never be

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has never been

old. People can remember it whenever they listen. They can find some memories because of traditional

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. Because traditional

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remind of people something which come from their culture.

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Therefore traditional

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Therefore, traditional

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is significant

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International

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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365 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

emotional release
cultural significance
globalization
cultural exchange
technology
preservation
cultural heritage
social cohesion
expression
consumption
production
traditional music
international music
diversity
identity

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There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

Fully explain your ideas

Every year large numbers of people migrate from one country to another for different reasons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of migration for the individual and for society as a whole.

It is common for each member of family to have their own piece of modern technology. Some people think this will lead them to break down of family relationships and communication. To what extent do you agree?

Young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

Some people think paying taxes is a big enough contribution to their society, while others think people have more responsibilities as members of society than only paying taxes. Discuss both of these views and give your opinion.