There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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There are many different types of

music

in the world today. Why do we need

music

? Is the traditional

music

of a country more important than the International

music

that is

heard everywhere nowadays? In the history of

human

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humanity

, people always try to be happy.

Therefore they

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Therefore, they

have found

different type

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a different type

of things to do that, and

music

is one of them. The

music

which was discovered by people who want to make happy themselves is one of vital thing the calm human soul.

Music

which touches people’s emotions and hearts is power If people know how can they use it as a healer.

when

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When

people feel upset, they compose some sad melodies. In

contras

the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared

contrast

countries

controls

, when they feel happy, they compose nice melodies to make

hem

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a hem

happy. When

music

touch people’s heart, they feel

relax

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relaxed

, comfortable.

Furthermore

music

can be

rehabilitation

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rehabilitated

for all of us.

For example

, a movie which has no

good

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better

sountracks

sound recording on a narrow strip of a motion picture film

soundtrack

syntax

does not liked by people, but if the movie has good

sountracks

the grammatical arrangement of words in sentences

syntax

soundtracks

poeple

(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively

people

this

movie. Because

music

is effect our emotions. Why many people love watching t Lord of the Rings or Harry Potter, have you ever thought about that

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Because the movies which have amazing

music

when

heared

detected or perceived by the sense of hearing

heard

heated

hired

by people

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they go their imagine life, because the

music

support our feelings.

Therefore people

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Therefore, people

need

music

. Traditional

music

which reflecting features of cultures and countries is some kind of a sign to realize what the countries have to show other people about their culture.

Tradiational

Suggestion

Traditional

music

make

Suggestion

makes

people stick together, because these people who have

common point

Suggestion

a common point

in the matter of traditional

music

have many true to life stories.

On the other hand

, International

music

only products

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the only products

of popular culture. It is like an instant

products

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product

. It is

become

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becoming

popular suddenly and

then

goes out rapid. People care these sort of

music

just for a while.

On the other hand

, Traditional

music

is a cult

music

, it

is never be

Suggestion

has never been

old. People can remember it whenever they listen. They can find some memories because of traditional

music

. Because traditional

music

remind of people something which come from their culture.

Therefore traditional

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Therefore, traditional

music

is significant

then

International

music

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
24Grammar mistakes
 

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

emotional release
cultural significance
globalization
cultural exchange
technology
preservation
cultural heritage
social cohesion
expression
consumption
production
traditional music
international music
diversity
identity

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In the past, most working people had only one job. However, nowadays, more and more people have more than one job at the same time. What are the reasons for this development? What are the advantages and disadvantages of having more than one job?

Some people claim that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement.

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