There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

There are many different types of
music
in the world today. Why do we need
music
? Is the traditional
music
of a country more important than the International
music
that is
heard everywhere nowadays? In the history of
human
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humanity
, people always try to be happy.
Therefore they
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Therefore, they
have found
different type
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a different type
of things to do that, and
music
is one of them. The
music
which was discovered by people who want to make happy themselves is one of vital thing the calm human soul.
Music
which touches people’s emotions and hearts is power If people know how can they use it as a healer.
when
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When
people feel upset, they compose some sad melodies. In
contras
the opposition or dissimilarity of things that are compared
contrast
countries
controls
, when they feel happy, they compose nice melodies to make
hem
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a hem
happy. When
music
touch people’s heart, they feel
relax
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relaxed
, comfortable.
Furthermore
,
music
can be
rehabilitation
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rehabilitated
for all of us.
For example
, a movie which has no
good
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better
sountracks
sound recording on a narrow strip of a motion picture film
soundtrack
syntax
does not liked by people, but if the movie has good
sountracks
the grammatical arrangement of words in sentences
syntax
soundtracks
poeple
(plural) any group of human beings (men or women or children) collectively
people
like
this
movie. Because
music
is effect our emotions. Why many people love watching t Lord of the Rings or Harry Potter, have you ever thought about that
?
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?
Because the movies which have amazing
music
when
heared
detected or perceived by the sense of hearing
heard
heated
hired
by people
,
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,
they go their imagine life, because the
music
support our feelings.
Therefore people
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Therefore, people
need
music
. Traditional
music
which reflecting features of cultures and countries is some kind of a sign to realize what the countries have to show other people about their culture.
Tradiational
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Traditional
music
make
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makes
people stick together, because these people who have
common point
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a common point
in the matter of traditional
music
have many true to life stories.
On the other hand
, International
music
is
only products
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the only products
of popular culture. It is like an instant
products
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product
. It is
become
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becoming
popular suddenly and
then
goes out rapid. People care these sort of
music
just for a while.
On the other hand
, Traditional
music
is a cult
music
, it
is never be
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has never been
old. People can remember it whenever they listen. They can find some memories because of traditional
music
. Because traditional
music
remind of people something which come from their culture.
Therefore traditional
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Therefore, traditional
music
is significant
then
International
music
.
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