Some people think that large, impressive buildings are important for a city. Others believe that the money should be spent on improving schools and hospitals. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Building huge and attractive structures is
a
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an
important for a city for some people, but the others say that the
money
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,
Accept space
,
which is used to construct
a
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an
impressive building, ought to be spent to improve schools and hospitals.
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essay mentions about both views and some examples about them. People
,
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,
living in a city, think that if
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
construct some attractive buildings, tourist may want to visit these structures. While there is not any benefit for citizens in
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sight, there are many positives.
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, citizens have to pay taxes and taxes are
incresing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
day by day, so if the structures attract some tourist, they won’t have to pay much more
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then
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than
. The other reason is simple. The citizens should find their way to look some landmark building.
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, they
also
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use
this
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structure for their photos because these buildings sometimes look amazing nowadays.
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, taking photos is so acceptable activity that attractive buildings are used for
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reason.
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the others should want to increase educational system and health system because they want to be used their
money
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more benefical
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most beneficial
more beneficial
activity.
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, citizens,
not want
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aren't wanting
spending
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to spend
their
money
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for impressive building, believe that if
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
spend their
money
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in
this
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way, it will go to rubbish.
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, they
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demand schools, with laboratories, comfortable desks and cutting-edge computers, because they pay their taxes and they deserve it. As for the hospitals,
goverments
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
governments
should buy new technological gadget and they
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pay much more
money
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for doctors because if they don’t do, some doctors want to go abroad for
job
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a job
jobs
so investment of all education to be a doctor go with him. In conclusion, I think both views are correct.
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, when governments make investment policies, they never forget that
money
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,
Accept space
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which is used for something, is belonged to everyone
,
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,
living in
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city.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Architectural grandeur
  • Iconic edifices
  • Economic catalyst
  • Cultural landmark
  • Urban fabric
  • Sustainable development
  • Public services
  • Fiscal responsibility
  • Community well-being
  • Infrastructure investment
  • Urban planning
  • Holistic approach
  • Government stewardship
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