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Compare the advantages and disadvantages of three of the following ways of learning a foreign language. State which you consider to be the most effective. studying on your own taking lessons with a private tutor taking lessons as part of a class taking lessons online going to live in a country where the language is spoken

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To be honest, the method I have
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caught or fixed
stuck
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to being
 the
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 one, studying on your own. Due to financial
limitaion
a principle that limits the extent of something
limitation
limiting
 and
time
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 problem, I usually studied myself, which was not bad. By doing it, I could save my energy and
time
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 because I didn't have to waste my
time
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 on the road. Plus, I could save my money
too since
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too, since
 it needed less money.
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, I often had a hard
time
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 understanding some difficult
parts especially
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parts, especially
 when it comes to speaking. I had nobody who could check what I said. In
this
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 part, I think it would be more effective to take lessons with
someone
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 though it would cost more money and
time
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. Having
someone
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 who will teach proper things right away would be
more great
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greater
 for some people and it would take less
time
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 to master a foreign
language
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 in the end.
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actually though
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actually, though
 I haven't studied
abraod
to or in a foreign country
abroad
 yet, I think going to live in a country where the
language
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 is spoken is the best way to overcome a foreign
language
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. If
someone
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 goes there, she or he
have
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has
 to use the
language
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, which can make
someone
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 more study. What's more, like the common belief, when it comes to a
language
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, the more using
time
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, the better would be. She or he can adapt to their new
language
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more fast
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faster
 than studying alone with books. They can learn more
vivid lively
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vivid, lively
language
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, which could not see in just books, and they would have more
time
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 to practice it in their real life. In conclusion, I think when it comes to learning a new
language
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, it would be the best to study abroad if they can.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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