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Languages are dying out all the time. The result of this is a word with fewer languages. This is a good thing for people everywhere. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that languages are diminishing with time.
Although
 some people argue that
this
 does not have any significance, in my opinion languages are extremely valuable and their existence matters. Spoken
language
 is deeply related to the nation and if the
language
 disappears, the nation will perish. We can see
this
 pattern
on
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of
 European colonization in
Americas
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the Americas
, where the most spoken idioms today are Spanish, English and Portuguese. Consequentially the native American languages may be considered dead.
Language
 involves the history, sense of
humor
a message whose ingenuity or verbal skill or incongruity has the power to evoke laughter
humour
 and understanding of a society´s feeling which are unique to them.
For example
, the Goytacazes, a minority native tribe in colonial Brazil, started educating their children in Portuguese and following that soon the number of
Goytacazes
 who spoke their native idiom decreased gradually. Nowadays, no one knows about them and it is believed that
this
 nation did not
last
 because their
language
 disappeared.
On the other hand
, we have people who claim that loss of languages is not important and they believe that
this
 makes our lives more convenient because communication will be is easier with fewer languages. Since there are more than four hundred languages in the world, it is challenging at times to communicate or make business between nations. In certain situations, even whether the conversation is translated, people cannot understand the real meaning of a sentence. It might be more than just the words
itself which
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itself, which
 can only be expressed in that particular
language
.
As a result
, the higher the number of nations
speak
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speaks
 the same, the greater the understanding. In conclusion, I strongly believe that languages are of paramount importance and they make the societies
last
. The maximum effort should be spent to protect them it is the only way to maintain cultural identity. The governments should design plans and implement them in educational institutions as well
as government organizations to
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as government organizations
 protect the local languages.
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