It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

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Upbringing of children is an

artitistic

relating to or characteristic of art or artists

artistic

activity

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Which

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requires lots of patience and understanding

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It is evident that women have proven to be successful in Parenting task over the men. In my opinion, mothers play a crucial role to make a child an ideal citizen of the community

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This

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essay will discuss the importance of motherhood for growth and

devolpment

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

of the offspring.

To begin

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with, Communication and conditioning are two important factors in rearing of children.Women have these

qualiites

an essential and distinguishing attribute of something or someone

qualities

becuase

for the reason that; on account of

because

they are

comparetively

in a relative manner; by comparison to something else

comparatively

less

agressive

having or showing determination and energetic pursuit of your ends

aggressive

and more understandable than men.To elaborate females are more supportive during the

porcess

a particular course of action intended to achieve a result

process

purchase

of physical

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emotional

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social and intellectual

devolpment

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

development

of a child from infancy to adulthood.Apart from

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, parenting refers to the intricacies involved in biological relationship which is beyond the understanding of men

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For

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example when

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example, when

infants are

hungary they

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hungry, they

hungry they

cry only women would

undertand

know and comprehend the nature or meaning of

understand

the same and will feed the child immediately

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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Word repetition
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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151 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

child-rearing
caregiver
social constructs
nurturing
gender roles
stereotypes
paternity leave
co-parenting
development
economic pressures
primary caregiver
gender biases
fluidity of roles
societal norms
inherent differences

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It is believed that women are more suited to child-rearing than men. What is your opinion on this issue?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Nowadays more and more tasks at home and at work are being performed by robots. Why do you think it’s happening? Is it a negative or positive development?

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Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones.