■ Write a letter to a sports club. Tell them you are not satisfied with the service and have already let them know about this. Write ▪What exactly wrong with their service ▪What happened after you complained the first time ▪What you want the club to do after your letter

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Dear Sir, I am writing letters to show my resentments about the amenities offered to members at the sports club. As a permanent member of your club is not satisfied with the cleaning of

washroom

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the washroom

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, hygiene of swimming pool and door lock of changing room is damaged, anyone can enter in. I have a complaint for

door

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the door

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lock is almost broken and found a cockroach in the pool in the previous month, the Pool’s water looks polluted and may cause infectious diseases. It has been said your issue would be resolved within one week, but

its

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25th

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the 25th

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day and no action has been taken for maintenance. If

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things would not be fixed I had to change my club. So, I shall be grateful to your management if there would be a proper check on the pool water cleaning and call a carpenter to fix the lock as soon as possible. I hope on my coming visit, things would be corrected properly. I look forward

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your prompt action. Yours faithfully, Sahar

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

172 words

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■ Write a letter to a sports club. Tell them you are not satisfied with the service and have already let them know about this. Write ▪What exactly wrong with their service ▪What happened after you complained the first time ▪What you want the club to do after your letter

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

In many parts of world there is continuos coverage of sport on television. Some people believe this discourages the young from taking part in any sport themselves. Discuss the view and give your own opinion.

Some people say that in all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, younger people are neglecting their right to vote. What problems does this cause and what are some of the possible solutions?

Some people think that we learn best through in person interaction with the teacher in a classroom. Others believe that learning is more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

Some people think women should be given equal chances to work and excel in their careers. Others believe that a woman's role should be limited to taking care of the house and children. Which opinion do you agree with and why? Include specific details and examples to support your choice