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■ Write a letter to a sports club. Tell them you are not satisfied with the service and have already let them know about this. Write ▪What exactly wrong with their service ▪What happened after you complained the first time ▪What you want the club to do after your letter

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Dear Sir, I am writing letters to show my resentments about the amenities offered to members at the sports club. As a permanent member of your club is not satisfied with the cleaning of
washroom
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, hygiene of swimming pool and door lock of changing room is damaged, anyone can enter in. I have a complaint for
door
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 lock is almost broken and found a cockroach in the pool in the previous month, the Pool’s water looks polluted and may cause infectious diseases. It has been said your issue would be resolved within one week, but
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25th
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 day and no action has been taken for maintenance. If
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things would not be fixed I had to change my club. So, I shall be grateful to your management if there would be a proper check on the pool water cleaning and call a carpenter to fix the lock as soon as possible. I hope on my coming visit, things would be corrected properly. I look forward
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 your prompt action. Yours faithfully, Sahar
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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