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Eventually, technology will solve the most important environmental problems the world faces today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The world as it is today relies heavily on
technology
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. Some say that environmental issues will
be not be solved
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not be solved
 by the
use
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 of modern
technology
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. While some believe that
technology
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 might
solve most the
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solve the most
 crucial environmental problems the world is facing today, I for one agree with
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 statement.
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 and foremost, climate change is one of the factors that even
technology
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 cannot fully solve. Many people are dependent on driving fuel cars and other vehicles to work. Cars release carbon monoxide and other types of harmful gases into the atmosphere.
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,
this
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 causes global
warming which
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warming, which
 is a major environmental problem.
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, the gift of
technology
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 has been a great
use
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 of help in reducing problems in the environment. There have been many great advancements in using solar
energy
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. In the recent decade, car companies have manufactured solar cars powered by the sun, using a battery or solar panel on the roof of
cars
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the cars
.
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 provides a great alternative rather than fuel cars as it has
lesser impact
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a lesser impact
 on the environment.
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, tons of
waste
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 materials are being brought to
waste
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 plants daily. By modern
technology
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, the
waste
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 is
then
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 incinerated in high heat in a furnace, to produce
energy
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 in the form of electricity.
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, electricity is
then
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 transmitted to cable lines to homes and other buildings.
This
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great
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greater
use
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 of
technology
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 not only solves the pollution crisis in a
country but
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country, but
 it
also
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 transforms
waste
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 products to clean
energy
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. In conclusion, I believe that the
use
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 of
technology
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 would greatly benefit a nation to reduce environmental problems. In the coming years, companies that can cause ecological problems should minimize pollutions and think of alternative ways to switch to clean
energy
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental problems
  • technology
  • solve
  • reduce
  • pollution levels
  • renewable energy sources
  • waste management systems
  • sufficient
  • human behavior
  • consumption patterns
  • collaboration
  • policy-making
  • essential
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