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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

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Social work makes a person a good human being, so a group of individuals believes that some convicts should not be sent to jail,
instead
 they should do unpaid work at social places. I completely believe that it not only makes them good individuals, but
also
 saves governments' money.
To begin
 with, if certain criminals made to do community work without any salary
then
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Then
 they can realize their mistakes and have enough time to learn from their misdeeds.
Therefore
, they will not involve in criminal activities again and become a good human being.
Consequently
, there will be a reduction in the crime rate in the society.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
in the United States of America, the government sends minor crime convicts
such
as
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As
 thieves to community centres, to learn from their mistakes so that they do not re-commit the crime.
Hence
, they become a social person.
Moreover
, it
also
 saves numerous resources when some criminals sent to do help the people in the social service centres.
This
 is because the government spent huge money to keep the prisoners behind the bars, so
this
 money can be saved and used to invest in various development projects.
For example
, the Canadian government, according to a research report published in a newspaper, spent more revenue
on
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for
 education, infrastructure and health sector than other countries because they do not waste their resources by sending all the offenders to jail.
Thus
, it is apparent that it saves a lot of funds and can be used to develop the nation. To summarize, according to me, serving without getting any wages, make the convicts good individuals and ultimately save the efforts of the state.
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