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It is too expensive to look after and repair old buildings. This money should be spent on building modern buildings instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#repair #buildings #money
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It is a fact that
everything even
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everything, even
 human
also
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 required update or replacement after a specific time. So, a substantial question raises, and
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 what should be done with old buildings. Some people opine that to spend
money
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 on their restoration and upkeep rather than to build modern ones. I partially agree with their views. So, I would discuss some points which strengthen my viewpoints in the upcoming paragraphs. There are many reasons/ arguments in favour to
repair
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 the old buildings. There is much building which is based on historical facts, so it is necessary to spend
money
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 to maintain and improve the structure to save it for upcoming generations and save it so that people get meaning full information from it. Some buildings are used for official work, so if these buildings are knocked down, it will affect the job, so it is better to
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 it
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 of building new construction.
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, people’s feeling and good memories are attached to the old building, so they prefer to spend
money
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 to
repair
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 it rather than to demolish it.
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, there are many merits of new buildings, and the foremost advantage is it could be made in
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 a way that it can accommodate more people in that much space. Modern architecture is constructed with new facilities
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 as new interior design, sufficiently airy and more secure as
compare
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compared
 to the old one. Another benefit is I can save much energy mean to say terraces could be used for solar panels which could save energy. Many buildings are or houses more than loo years old and these types of the structure required to maintain after
few months
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a few months
 and are not secure for people, so it is good to build a new building
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 to
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 old ones. In conclusion, as we have seen above, those old buildings are still meaningful to
people
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peoples
’ lives as well as educational purpose.
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, people should be encouraged to preserve our historical and significant
structure but
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structure, but
 build a new one if old building required much
money
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 for
repair
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 and maintains.
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