Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connections between people.

Although
many would argue that
technology
has
create
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created
a gap between generations, I think it has filled many gaps in communication between masses. I somehow agree with the fact that it has taken over most of our
hours
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hour
, in spite of
this
aspect
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
totally support advancement. If I talk about emails, it has become
the most fastest
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the fastest
and reliable source of communication in
corporate world
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the corporate world
. It is
time
saving and at the same
time
it does not require any efforts but power and internet connection.
On the other hand
in early ages
this
work was done by letter writing and later by sending
fax
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faxes
a fax
.
In contrast
with email both the processes required much more
time
and energy. Sending letter needs manpower, writing efforts, and a proper post-office system. As far as for email, we only need a laptop or a cell phone with internet connection. Instant messaging and social media has helped many people around the globe to talk to each other in a more efficient way. I believe it has
lessen
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lessened
the distance between families living far away from home. I have seen many people finding their lost friends and
family social
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family, social
media
such
as Facebook and
instagram
. Messaging is another easiest way to connect with
respective person
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the respective person
to inquire about something or to send information about yourself. Before the
technology
era people have faced many difficulties in conveying some important news to the other person who lived far away from the native country or city. I have an example of my own family. My father used to live abroad due to his job. When my grandfather died, my father wasn't there with his family, there was no
affective
producing or capable of producing an intended result or having a striking effect
effective
communication system exist back in early 80's. My mother
send
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sends
him a letter which reached to him almost half a month later, and due to that he missed the significant moment of his father's funeral which he regret till the date. In the
end i
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end, I
end I
would like to state that
technology
has helped us in many ways, it contributes in making people more social and confident. It helps us
saving
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save
to save
time
and energy that we can use
in somewhere else
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somewhere else
. Our generation
have become
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has become
more productive in corporate and business sector, it helped in
developing economy
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developing economies
the developing economy
. Students are benefited through the use of computers and internet. For me
its
it is
it's
a positive change in the world by spreading
technology
all over
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