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Some people believe arts subjects such as literature and music have little importance in schools today. To what extent do you agree with this?

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In education, there has been divided opinion regarding
art
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 and practical
subject
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subject, such
such
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 as math and science. Today,
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the debate
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continues
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 even if education has been altered by high-tech technology and modern approach to the
school
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 curriculum. I totally don’t agree with
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 view as
art
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 subjects influence on students’ creativity as well as their learning
ability
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.
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 of all,
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 subjects can be a favourable source that
nurture
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nurtures
 schoolchild’s creativeness on different area.
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 subjects have an immense
ability
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 that gives a chance to student for creating
art
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 works by themselves in
huge world
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the huge world
a huge world
. From a psychological
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point
 of view,
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 kind of lessons
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 as literature possess a lot of creatures and elements that helps to wake up inner
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 inside a person who are on the
school
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 year. Arts lessons can not be considered as an impractical
lessons
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lesson
 because they have huge effects on the students’ cognitive development. A
brunch
a division of some larger or more complex organization
branch
 of
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knowledge, such
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 as music may assist to activate brain
neurons which
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neurons, which
 feed
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 children’s
ability
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 to absorb materials that are given in lesson books. Research that was conducted by American university shows that learners who
are exposed
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are exposed to such
such
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 kind of lesson in the
school
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 years, gets more success in the future career than others. In the conclusion, though some people regard the
art
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 lessons as impractical because of their less importance in
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school but
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school, but
 we can not totally ignore them from
curriculum
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the curriculum
. Since they trigger students’ creativity and assess their cognitive development
,
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,
 they should be given space in lesson environment.
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