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Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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One of the important parts of life is to
work
.
Work
 can be divided into two parts; paid and unpaid. It is often argued by some people that whenever available, teenagers should do charity
work
 to help the local community. It is
also
 believed that
this
 kind of
work
 would be helpful to teenagers himself as well as to the community. I agree with
this
 given statement, because it
help
Suggestion
helps
 youngster to make friends
To begin
 with, youngsters can learn via voluntary
work
. It gives opportunity to learn new
work
 as well as some real things like painting on walls,
work
 management etc.
Secondly
, they can make new friends. Needless to say, co-workers of the same age become good friends and if many people
work
 together in a common
cause they
Accept comma addition
cause, they
 spend time together and become friends and having friends is always useful.
On the other hand
, the local community can
also
 be beneficial
from
Suggestion
for
this
. They can save money by getting people who are willing to spend their free time. They can build something useful;
for example
, they can build new playgrounds for children with
this
.
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