Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do so many working people not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Nowadays people doing jobs at
different firm
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different firms
a different firm
mostly have a fixed routine and, making a
time
for their families are
also
sometime
challanges
take exception to
challenges
faced among them.
In
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On
such
schedule it is only important to focus on duty rather than other physical exercises that may create health issues for long term
such
as diabetes. In my opinion, at least
few hours
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a few hours
in a week an individual should prepare to do
exercise
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exercises
that can be planned in many ways as discussed below.
Initially
, almost all public who
are
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is
busy half of their
day
in duty should
also
be analysed
that is
, either it is all
day
on a table or shifting one place to another for many
puposes
an anticipated outcome that is intended or that guides your planned actions
purposes
.
For example
, a school or college teacher have to think and be actively involved in each
students
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student's
desk for certain hours are tired after all
day
in their
offfices
place of business where professional or clerical duties are performed
offices
.
Furthermore
, in
such
sutuation
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
situations
where
working place
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the working place
has
lot
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lots
of physical stress do not require above sports for remaining fit.
In
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On
the other hand, another group of public who have to prepare all paper and submit
timely sometimes
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timely, sometimes
do not even have
time
to eat properly.
For example
, an individual who
is staying
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stays
on
computer
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the computer
a computer
all
day
have risk of other health problem relating to
eyes
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the eyes
and, obesity
due
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Due
to lack of exercise.
In addition
, one who maintains proper diet and regular workouts that may be spiritual for
little
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less
time
also
can get rid of many problems. In conclusion, exercises are not only the ultimate resource to remain fit and
healthy but
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healthy, but
, other ways if one has very busy
life
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life, then
then
they must eat
little
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less
and do short period workouts like yoga,
warmup
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warm up
and many more for few
time
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times
before getting ready to start the
day
.
Submitted by Avaya Bhattarai on

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