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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Provide reasons for your answer. Include relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

#wealth #guaranty #happiness
In
this
 day and age, a high-standard living and
affluance
abundant wealth
affluence
 seems significant to almost people.
Nevertheless
, others think that riches does not greatly determine their pleased lives. And I strongly agree with
this
. Wealthy persons stand a good chance of doing anything they want, from shopping to
travelling
Suggestion
travel
.
However
 expensive a skirt is, they still fork out
on
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for
 it, which as long as
satisfies
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satisfying
 their interest.
Nevertheless
, those
from
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of
 high society are always nervous
from
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of
about
 losing their assets. Once their money is lost, having
suspicion
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a suspicion
suspicions
 about relatives may be
happened
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happening
, let alone being doubtful of strangers. It might lead to family relationship breaking-off.
Besides
, the wealthy
is
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are
has been
have been
 always busy with their businesses, which makes them not enjoy precious moments with families and relatives.
In addition
, a real welfare is to have sincere friends and faithful lovers. A worthy relationship cannot be bought with riches or gold. Rich people seem to meet
such
 fortune-hunters or gold-diggers rather than ones honestly love them. It is no doubt that the rich usually have more foes who just want their
propoties
something owned; any tangible or intangible possession that is owned by someone
properties
. Evidently, money is not the essence of happiness. All things considered, affluence is not regarded as the most crucial role of a happy life. Sometimes, we will have only
deceiful relationship
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a deceitful relationship
deceitful relationship
 rather than truthful one.
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