SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ADVERTISING ENCOURAGES US TO BUY THINGS THAT WE REALLY DO NOT NEED. OTHERS SAY THAT ADVERTISEMENTS TELL US ABOUT NEW PRODUCTS THAT MAY IMPROVE OUR LIVES, WHICH VIEWPOINT DO YOU AGREE WITH?

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Many people believe that advertisements offered in

this

era

a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)

area

through mass or social media in general are presumably unnecessary while others opine that stuffs offered are highly auspicious for societal lives. Even though it seems to me that the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

view is more acceptable,

however

I will explore both views in

this

essay.

To begin

with, products offered by advertisements through mass or social media tend not to represent what people interested or feel excited in due to

demands

Suggestion

the demands

of social media foundation in general. It is pretty self-explanatory, when particular foundation decides on using

paid

Suggestion

pay

-services offered by social media, no matter how abominable the product is, or deplorable the advertisement is, it constrains the foundations to show up people’s products being agreed due to paid-services. It can be illustrated by how

facebook

Suggestion

Facebook

offers a trading training for newbie to those who are being in under ages.

That is

to mean, it seems no longer represent what adolescents

are delighted

Suggestion

have delighted

delight

in.

On the other hand

, it is believed by a group of people that advertisements are reportedly showing products that can develop our lives due to some reasons.

Firstly

, automatic feature of the advertisements

are enable

Suggestion

is enabling

enables

to fit with the social media users based on their ages and interests,

for example

instagram

, that display female dresses to female fashionable teenagers and offer language courses and training to the students. The

second

reason comes from the reality. Due to people’s interests having been experiencing alterations day by day, the entrepreneurs compete one another to create breakthrough of product that can allure the interest of wider citizens. Because of

this

, many fashionable clothes being created and being offered through advertisements nowadays is presumably more abominable in comparison with ages back. Summing up, while

automatic feature

Suggestion

the automatic feature

of the advertisements and rapid changes of breakthrough of products offered, I do not believe that advertisements displayed are inauspicious for improvement of life.

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Overall Band Score

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

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