SOME PEOPLE SAY THAT ADVERTISING ENCOURAGES US TO BUY THINGS THAT WE REALLY DO NOT NEED. OTHERS SAY THAT ADVERTISEMENTS TELL US ABOUT NEW PRODUCTS THAT MAY IMPROVE OUR LIVES, WHICH VIEWPOINT DO YOU AGREE WITH?

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Many people believe that advertisements offered in

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a particular geographical region of indefinite boundary (usually serving some special purpose or distinguished by its people or culture or geography)

area

through mass or social media in general are presumably unnecessary while others opine that stuffs offered are highly auspicious for societal lives. Even though it seems to me that the

later

referring to the second of two things or persons mentioned (or the last one or ones of several)

latter

view is more acceptable,

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I will explore both views in

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essay.

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with, products offered by advertisements through mass or social media tend not to represent what people interested or feel excited in due to

demands

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the demands

of social media foundation in general. It is pretty self-explanatory, when particular foundation decides on using

paid

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pay

-services offered by social media, no matter how abominable the product is, or deplorable the advertisement is, it constrains the foundations to show up people’s products being agreed due to paid-services. It can be illustrated by how

facebook

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Facebook

offers a trading training for newbie to those who are being in under ages.

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to mean, it seems no longer represent what adolescents

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have delighted

delight

in.

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, it is believed by a group of people that advertisements are reportedly showing products that can develop our lives due to some reasons.

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, automatic feature of the advertisements

are enable

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is enabling

enables

to fit with the social media users based on their ages and interests,

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instagram

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, that display female dresses to female fashionable teenagers and offer language courses and training to the students. The

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reason comes from the reality. Due to people’s interests having been experiencing alterations day by day, the entrepreneurs compete one another to create breakthrough of product that can allure the interest of wider citizens. Because of

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the automatic feature

of the advertisements and rapid changes of breakthrough of products offered, I do not believe that advertisements displayed are inauspicious for improvement of life.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.5

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

317 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
well-being

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