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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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Statistical studies over the
last
 decade have shown an invariable increase in
crime
 rates due to various reasons.
This
 essay will
dive
turn up, loosen, or remove earth
delve
 into the causes of
crime
 and suggest remedies to mitigate the rise in criminal activities. Rapid urbanization has caused the migration of the rural population to urban areas in search of greener pastures all over the world.
This
 increase in competition for housing, employment and other necessities has led to a precarious situation in larger cities. Rising unemployment and discontent amongst the people due to
socio-economic
involving social as well as economic factors
socioeconomic
 reasons manifest in different ways. Crimes committed by the youth can be attributed to illiteracy, peer pressure or circumstances. Rising cost of living and disparity between the rich and the poor are
also
 leading causes of
crime
 in cities. Sometimes, the media
also
 glorifies
crime
. Teenagers who watch
such
 programmes often arrive at the conclusion that it is ‘cool’ to get involved in anti-social or criminal activities. Even in
such
 a grim situation, there are plenty of actions that can be taken to curtail rising
crime
 rates. The governing bodies must help create employment opportunities for youth in rural areas and help them develop the economy. Entrepreneurs in cities should be entrusted with the task of creating job opportunities for the youth. Primary education should be made compulsory across the nation so as to discourage the young from diverting towards crimes. To contain anti-social situations, the government should award stringent punishments to criminals.
In
addition providing
Accept comma addition
addition, providing
 subsidies to people living
under
Suggestion
below
 poverty levels would help provide sustenance. To sum it up, even though countries have seen a surge in crimes year after year due to various reasons, there are solutions that can prove beneficial. Good governance combined with responsible acts from citizens can help eradicate crimes from the face of earth.
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