Dear Ronnie,
Hope all is well,
FirstlyLinking Words
Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.
I would like to thank you for
warmCorrect article usage
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hospitality provided by you and your
FamilyCorrect your spelling
The word Family doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.
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during my stay at your home place in Bali.
During the stay at your place, I Forgot my
Correct your spelling
The word wrist watch seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.
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wrist watchCorrect your spelling
The word wrist watch seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.
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on your couch, when we were discussing
overCorrect pronoun usage
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the coffee.
ItsReplace the word
It appears that the possessive pronoun Its should be a contraction instead. Consider changing it.
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a Tissot Watch with stainless steel body and black dial the dial glows in dark and has starting letter of my Name engraved on the
back sideCorrect your spelling
The word back side seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.
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the watch is close to my soul as its gift from somebody and is a limited edition watch.
If you find the same, can you please inform me as well it would be a great help if you can express courier the same to my residence address which is present in your record
.Change the punctuation
Consider using a question mark to signify that this sentence is a question.
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I am sorry for the inconvenience caused to you on my behalf.
Would await
for Change preposition
It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.
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some positive reply from your side
Wishing you Good health
Regards,
John