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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarket while some others prefer to shop online. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

#people #shop #food #supermarket
It is argued that the growth of
economy
Suggestion
the economy
 is the key
of
Suggestion
to
 a
country
's success, but despite of
this
, other people believe that there are more valuable factors. Personally speaking, I definitely agree with the statement above, because I think that a
country
's success depends on not only one
,
Accept space
,
but more factors,
such
 as education and medicine.
First
 of all, the main factor which could help a
country
 to be on top, would be its education. People represent their home, and their home should provide them the ultimate learning
possibilites
a future prospect or potential
possibilities
, with high ranking schools and universities, good teachers and friendly staff.
For example
, the
country
 where I live doesn't offer these kind of opportunities,
this
 being the reason why most of the young generation is moving abroad for a better future.
Secondly
, another meaningful factor which helps with the success is the medicine and well prepared doctors living in a
country
. One of the most important thing is to not have a lack of hospitals and people who are up to date with the most complicated diseases. Government should provide all sorts of machines that can be useful to treat serious health issues,
such
 as cancer is AIDs. The citizens are more likely to remain in a
country
 where they trust the doctors. In conclusion, there are many factors which can influence a
country
's image, one of the most important is education and medicine.
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