Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

People have different opinions about the right
age
of the formal
education
of children. Some think that it should start as early as possible while others think that it should not start until 7 years of
age
.
This
essay will discuss both the views and my
view point
a mental position from which things are viewed
viewpoint
. Nowadays, parents are anxious about their children's
education
. They play a pivotal role in taking decisions for their children's future. They
seeks
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seek
are seeking
have sought
advice of people for choosing the perfect
school
of
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for
their children. I think that formal
education
should start early as children of today's
age
are more mature compared to children of previous generations. With the help of smartphones, they are able to learn things easily and fast. If their formal
education
starts
early
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early, then
then
they can finish their college by the
age
of 22. They can step into the corporate world as working professionals early and
this
can help them in taking career decisions at an early stage.
For instance
, one of my
friend
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friends
met with an accident when he was in the 10th grade. He sacrificed one year of his life. Since he started his formal
education
earlier than usual
age
, he completed the college at the same
age
I completed mine. So, these kind of incidents
can be cover
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can cover
can be covered
up if formal
education
starts early.
However
, it is
also
true that children should be given time to enjoy their childhood. Children can feel pressurized by going to the
school
at
an
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a
younger
age
. They may not be able to cope up with the activities which
school
conducts and
therefore
they can start disliking their
school
. In spite of knowing
repurcussions
a remote or indirect consequence of some action
repercussions
, we like to put them in
school
as early as possible.
Instead
of thinking about the consequences, it is better to think about the future of kids. Having said that, primary
school
can make children competitive. Children can learn values and discipline. So I believe that it is better if children's formal
education
starts as early as possible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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