Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, there are many young people who are suffering from health problems because they do not like to do some exercise. It is a good idea to force

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group having more outdoor activities in order to make them healthier of

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physical and mental status. I firmly agree with

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statement and

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essay will explore

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views.

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, there have been many high technologies introduced to our world,

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as the internet which provides a lot of activities, specially indoor activities like games, comedy shows and so on.

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most of youngsters

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most youngsters

are likely enjoyed and spent most of their leisure time on it.

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group will not want to go out and do some

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sports, outdoor

activities as there have been served from many convenient tools. So these groups

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tend

to be obese and having silent diseases,

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as diabetes, high cholesterols and so on.

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, from Thai Health reports showed that

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there are increasing

obesity in children aged between 6 and 12 years old.

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, if there are encouragements from

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school and family to convince the young adults having some sports

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as soccer, swimming, volleyball and any other sports, it may help them

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get

more outdoor activities.

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, they will increase of movement and stimulate their blood circulation and

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burn the energy, so

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will help them

maintaining

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maintain

to maintain

a strong body

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of only sitting all day in front of the television. To sum up,

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of government and family should encourage their children having fun from outdoor activities more than sitting and playing games all the time. I do agree with forcing

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group to have more socializing in the real world and

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will offer them getting stronger.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Sedentary lifestyle
Mandatory
Physical activity
Mental well-being
Cardiovascular health
Peer interaction
Motivation
Extracurricular activities
Health curriculum
Fitness culture
Academic performance
Compulsory participation
Incentivizing
Physical education
Overall well-being

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Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree?

You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include : &Where you stayed. & What the problems were. & How they can fix your complaints.

Discuss how the roles of the Knight and the Bishop in a game of chess can be seen as a metaphor for the relationship between men and women in society. Use examples from the text to support your argument.

You have unexpectedly come into a large sum of money and you want to share this good news with your friend. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter ● explain where the money came from ● say what you intend to do with the money ● invite your friend to celebrate your good fortune.

As the internet becomes more popular, newspapers are becoming a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?