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Now a days online education has become popular as more institute and companies are offering courses online . However , many people prefer the traditional , classroom training or study .discuss the disadvantages of both methods.

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Due to the advance of technologies, an
internet
 is more involved in our lives
such
 as entertainment, education. Some universities start to offer another choice of studying which is an online learning so that students can
study
 their courses on the
internet
. As the online
course
 can be accessed through the
internet
, it is more convenient for students.
First
, students can access the
course
 from anywhere they want. No matter where they are, they can
study
 so easily.
Second
, the online learning can be studied at any time they are available, so it is more flexible in time.
This
 is a benefit for some people who already have jobs and want to
study
 along with their careers.
However
, there are some limitations
from
Suggestion
of
 the online
course
.
First
, as it needs the
internet
 connection, some people find it difficult to access that
course
.
For example
, people who cannot reach the
internet
 will not be able to
study
.
Therefore
, it is a big limitation for online learning. Another point is a connection. Some people decide to
study
 at a university so that they will find new friends and connections with others. When studying online, students do not have a chance to meet each other and it is more difficult to start relationships. In conclusion, even if online
course
 has a
few of limitations
Suggestion
few limitations
, like
internet
 connection, relationships with others, it has a lot of advantages. People can
study
 at any place and
time which
Accept comma addition
time, which
 give more flexibility in life. I believe that it is a positive development to be able to
study
 on the
internet
 which gives another option for students.
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