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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learn a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school.Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages

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People have different views about whether the pupils should learn a new
language
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 at primary or secondary
school
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. While generally speaking, children should have begun studying a foreign
language
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 at secondary
school
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, and I believe that it will be more benefits for children to learn at primary
school
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. On the one hand, some people believe that it tends to enhance studying burdens on children if they consider a foreign
language
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 at an early
age
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. Because learning a new
language
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 is not only requires the excellent memory but
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 practices. The process is so tedious and mechanical that it is
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unrealistic
 to force primary pupils to keep practicing all day long. So maybe secondary pupils are more suitable.
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, it is no doubt that the earlier
age
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 children are beginning to learn a foreign
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, the more advantages they will gain.
Firstly
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, the
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 before ten years old is the golden period of learning the
language
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 for children. Because young
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age children
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age, children
 are ace at imitation, which can make them grasp a new
language
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 more conveniently,
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, learning a speech at an early
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 will stimulate the development of children’s brains and excavate their genius of the word. In conclusion,
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 learning a new
language
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 at primary
school
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 have some disadvantages, in the long term, it has more good than harm for children.
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