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It is sometimes said that the countryside offers a high quality of life, especially for families. What are the arguments for and against families choosing to live and work in the countryside, for example as farmers? What is your own view about this?

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There can be few choices in
life
 more important than where to settle as a family, and the question of an urban or rural location is complex. There are strong arguments for and against living in the
countryside
, as we will discuss now. On the one hand, it might be said that the
countryside
 is rather a backwater, with fewer cultural amenities than a city in the form of museums, theatres and even sporting events.
This
 may mean that families become isolated, especially as rural depopulation leaves fewer country dwellers in the area, as we see,
for example
, in central France. Added to
this
 is the scarcity of schools and colleges, meaning that children may need to travel long distances for their education.
Finally
, career options may be more limited in the
countryside
 for both parents and children, resulting in rural unemployment and long-term rural poverty in the worst cases.
Conversely
,
life
 in the
countryside
 has rewards which go beyond material considerations.
For example
, the abundance of natural resources
such
 as land,
wildlife forestry
Accept comma addition
wildlife, forestry
 and water bodies means that a comparatively simple
life
 can be lived at a subsistence level. Many country residents are self-sufficient smallholders in
this
 sense, safeguarding them from the changes in the wider economy which can afflict city dwellers. If the parents are farmers, children learn the importance of animal husbandry, methods of farming
such
 as crop rotation and irrigation, and generally may become more in tune with the natural world
as a result
.
Finally
, as technology enables children to undertake distance learning or remote viewing of cultural attractions
such
 as museums, they should be less isolated from their cultural heritage. Overall, it seems to me that
quality
Suggestion
the quality
 of
life
 in the
countryside
 today is indeed quite high, with its advantages of resources, self-sufficiency and environmental awareness.
This
 is especially true now that communications are reducing the risk of isolation in
such
 far-flung communities
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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